Monday, February 1, 2010

perspective homework

Today was a blast. We beat up some geek in the park, I was so bored on that day me and my friend saw that kid walking down the path on the way home and I thought to myself “I’m so bored let’s go pound on the kid”, but in the middle of it the other kids were walking past but didn’t even try to help. After the beating we gave the poor little brat another bunch of about 3 or 4 people walked past, the expression on their faces when they saw the brat on the floor was so funny, this one girl look as if she was our next victim it was hilarious. We waited until they past by and then we nicked his wallet from him, and kicked him one last time then walked away. After about 5 minutes the kid finally came through and ran crying back home seeing him we realized we had taken his wallet so we decided to take a peek, and boy was there a lot of money it was about 20 to 30 pounds at that time I was thinking how spoiled is this kid and I was feeling great and aroused. About an hour later a couple of our friends came by and I told them what we had done, the reaction was not what I expected it to be they were disgusted about what we did then they stared to give us these annoyingly long lectures about assaulting people and stealing from them, we were so fed up with listening to them go on and on about the consequences that I decided to go find the little brat and give him back his wallet. When I found out where he lives and went to his house he was out side with a lot of his friends and they had B.B guns at that moment I thought to myself “ what have I gotten myself in to ’’ but I still I continued forward and as soon as he saw me I knew right there I was going to get beaten up and guess what I got shot a few times but I managed to give him his wallet back and apologized to him without getting beaten up as much as I expected I would have. I made my way back to the park and told all my friends that I gave it back to him and most of them said that was the right thing to do but the one who also beat the kid up said I was a chicken and spat in my face but I still felt good about my self for giving it back to the kid even if I lost a friend.

6 comments:

  1. Danny good and interesting diary entry but quite muddled up in your structure of writing. Nice idea about the BB guns might use it sometimes.

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  2. I agree- watch out for run-on sentences and overuse of the same word, in this case "kid".

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  3. I think the story is very good except for the part where the boy returns the wallet. But this doesn't mean that the boy shoudn't return the wallet. Really, I didn't mean that. Trust me.

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  4. Maybe you should write in paragraphs next time, so the reader doesn't those his/herself in the words. The story is good, and reflects upon a lot of bullies I've run into in my experience.
    Good Job!

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  5. Jae ho i wrote the boy gives back the wallet to make him look like he has a heart and to put a twist on thing where its not just beat up steal and keep

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